my 1st poem. pls don't say so bad

[mido_3000]

Why it seems strange when it comes to you.
Why I feel world is so tight.
Not sure really what to do.
Why the lights are so bright

I am your passion
I am your heart
I am your being
I am the start

I live inside you
I chase your blood
Holding your vines
I am your love god

I am your world
I am your love
I am the sky
And the moon above

I am your nights
I am you kiss
I am the longing
People you miss

I am your way
I am the road
I am your happiness
When you feel good

I am close to you
More than you think
I am the strange mood
When your color is pink

Try to find me
Search in you
I am living there
And I'll always do

pls tell me what u think.....

[nice world]

i like it , good poem

[brown_samra]

a goo start
keep it up

[sbirsa]

Excellent !!!

Keep on working , you are in the right way ;)

[hbailla]

good job
keep on

[kastilo_milta]

مش هاقول غير انه برفكت
ميه ميه وكمل شغلك صدقنى كلامك جميل جدا

[ola4]

nice words
and i actually like it
there r some mistakes
but its a good start
keep going on