احتاج الى المساعدة، help me

[طالبة علم]

بسم الله الرحمن الرحيم
السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته-

حياك الله أخوتي الكرام في هذا المنتدى المبارك ان شاء الله، وطيّب الله اوقاتكم وتقبل منكم صالح اعمالكم.
كما ترون انا عضوة جديدة بينكم، الا انني متابعة لكم منذ زمن.
واني اطمع بمساعدتكم لي، فأن قبلتم فبارك الله بك ومني خالص دعواتي لكم.
انا طالبة علم وفي نفس الوقت زوجة وأم. اني ادرس اللغة الأنجليزية، وبحاجة الى مساعدة في تطوير مهاراتي الكتابية، writting skilling

بالتفصيل: اريد احدا ان يصح كتاباتي ويدلني للكتابة الصحية.
اقصد مثل اذا كتبت هذه الفقرة:

I am a married woman and a mother at the same time. I like to learn English because it lets me to make foriegn relationships, and it helps me to be an educational person. Moreover, English is a part of my life, I like it, may I say I love it.
So I need to improve my writting skilling, so could you please help me?

فمثلا في هذه الفقرة قد يحدث معي اخطاء في القواعد، من فهم او ترتيب،او منطق، وانا أحتاج الى من يصحح أخطائي مع شرح السبب كي لا اكرر نفس الخطأ.


هلا قبلتوا مد العون لي؟
انتظرك ردكم بفارغ الصبر.
بارك الله بكم.

[أميرة الأطلس]

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كان بودي اساعدك بس والله مش بايدي
ممكن اصدقائنا في المنتدى يساعدوكي

[mardi]

السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته
مرحبا بك معنا اختي في بيتك الثاني وان شاء الله يطوع احد الاخوة الدين لهم الخبرة في اللغة الانجليزية في مساعدتك

[The Developer]

السلام عليكم و رحمة الله و بركاته
I want to tell you some advice about writing skills
writing skills depend on some elements as the following:
1.Your English Grammar
2.Your Vocabulary knowledge
3.Your Experience from reading.

I wish the above information is useful

[طالبة علم]

بسم الله الرحمن الرحيم
السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته-

Thanks for your passing, and I appreciate all of your desire to help me.

For the advice, they are really imporant and I can not ignore them, but I am stell needing for a help.

[Nature-Error]

Bah je suis un marocain et j'aime aussi cette langue, bon peut être qu'en causant sur Msn on arrivera à s'entraider côté grammaire et writing' skills, si t'es interessé, voilà mon Msn, stanislas_xavier@hotmail.com

[طالبة علم]

بسم الله الرحمن الرحيم
السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته-

Thanks brother for passing, but I cannot understand this language. Could you please write in English?

[msafifi]

dear sister ur english isn't bad , it's very nice or u can say that r good in english but u afraid from the mistakes , but to try to help u i wanna tell u that the english people is very flexible people , because the E language is the most wide language in the world so they understanding the mistakes is a normal thing for them , so if wanna
1-fly to any E country
2-speake to E guy
3-read E
4- write
5-speake
u have to
1- get the courage of speaking freely and by the time and practice u can improve ur self
2-take alot of E learning programs like ROSETTA STONE
3-ask help in the e-prog. forum
4-and i finished the rosetta stone links in the E forum u can get it or ask me in the private and i'll send it to u
5-know that all the forum members is under ur service...here we r like 1 helpfull familly members

I hope i help

[ola4]

:smailes65: hi sis: first of all when u need to introduce urself u have to begin with ur name.
example my name is ______. then you have to continue in saying what do u want others to know about u
Second i will try to correct the paragraph u wrote and then i will explain some of the wrong things u have written

This was ur paragraph

I am a married woman and a mother at the same time. I like to learn English because it lets me to make foriegn relationships, and it helps me to be an educational person. Moreover, English is a part of my life, I like it, may I say I love it.
So I need to improve my writting skilling, so could you please help me?

and this is how i corrected it

my name is ______. I am a married woman and a mother for # children. I like to learn English because it (lets) helps me make freindship relationships with foreigners (helps me get acquainted with foreign people). It also helps me be an educated person. Moreover, English is a part of my life. I like it. I may even say I love it.
That's why I need to improve my writting skills, so could you please help me?

third:

1- u said im a mother at the same time
usually when we write im a mother too, people expect us to say how many children do we have

2- u said it lets me to make
verbs like (let - help) are usually followed by a verb not preceded by to example it (helps-lets) me make

3- u said foreign relationships
we dont make foreign relationships but we make relationships with foreigners and in order not to be misunderstood it is better to say friendhsip relations

4- educational person
educational is for institutions, programs and books and things like that but when we talked about people we say educated (mothakafeen) ok


5- u use a lot of commas (,) and this is not good in writing.
when u want to write, write as much short senteces as u can because short sentences make ur mistakes less.

my last advice for you is to try to practice and dont be shy to ask for help. always ask for help and try to correct ur mistakes as soon as anyone pays ur attention to them. i believe that we learn the best when we learn from our own mistakes because the information stick into our minds easily. i think you can do well because you have the will for such a thing

my best wishes for you and God bless you

if u need anything and any help im ready for that and if u need me to explain again some things in arabic i would do
that with pleasure

[scorpionking4999]

hi TALEBAT ELM i have just read what you have written and , in fact , it is very impressive , Iwould like also to add that I read what OLA4 have written and I agree altogether with her .I dare say that she is very knowledgeable of english .Your english is very good but needs some improvements and this will come by training and practice .Always our English docctors address us that "language is practice " and if you want any help or correction of a paragraph or what so ever you write just ask me and I will be at your service at once .DO NOT HESITATE .
with my best wishes

[ola4]

hi TALEBAT ELM i have just read what you have written and , in fact , it is very impressive , Iwould like also to add that I read what OLA4 have written and I agree altogether with her .I dare say that she is very knowledgeable of english .Your english is very good but needs some improvements and this will come by training and practice .Always our English docctors address us that "language is practice " and if you want any help or correction of a paragraph or what so ever you write just ask me and I will be at your service at once .DO NOT HESITATE .
with my best wishes

Thx for reading all what i have said but again all i wanted to do is offer some help to our friend. i wish that my comments were in some way useful to her

thx again

[scorpionking4999]

For miss OLA4 thanx for what you write but i want to tell you that learning through fourms _ with all respect shown for ours-is not good a good way to master english but through attending english courses
here only we can correct paragraphs or even essays , give recommendations but no more
and thankx again for ur consideration

[ola4]

For scorpionking

Thx for the comments and im 100% with what ur saying but if our friend asks for help here or even others why not help them with what we could. here there are a quite good number of people who can do this and i like to be one of them. i totally agree with u about taking english courses and attending classes as the best way to learn languages and sometimes my friend even this is not enough. anyway we dont have to be so pessimistic because some of the people here have a good will and maybe their will could lead them to learn something good for them

[scorpionking4999]

thanks for your interest
i agree with you altogether

[happytofita]

This will help you :):smailes12:



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